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Post Re: YomToxic's stories.
Correct.
What else is left to say?

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Post Re: YomToxic's stories.
So it's obvious the style of it. It has a focus on conversation and Jack doesn't really give a shit, he just wants to get laid. Jill is really the one pulling the story along as she has a deep care for her brother that's probably misinterpreted as sexual love. Regardless the characters act more knowing and self aware than they should. They act like teenagers or awkward adults when they're really kids. They also know way more about sex than most kids their age, especially given the context of the original poem.

It's kind of silly that the first line of the poem is included in how different it is from the rest of the story in writing style. It plays it as a parody and not a fanfiction. The actual story pays light attention to physical details, trying to make a realistic sexual situation the two might get in. In actuality Jill is just being a slut towards Jack, while he's just being an awkward somewhat knowing kid. I don't know if she's an all around one and probably not seeing as she's a virgin but that's unsaid by the story. It definitely has plays from hentai story because of the simplistic this then that dialouge, taking simple things and using emotions to convey them. On that the characters are dull. Jack is just a dorky kid who won't take charge, and his sister is kinda slutty in the moment. Not much to it. There are ways to add in character, but really it's a porn parody of a poem. It does it's simplistic style well taking care of the setings, although it doesn't go into to much detail on the sex.

altogether as a quality work it would rate lower, but as an exercise in basic parody it works well.

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Post Re: YomToxic's stories.
I failed in english back in 2002, so HA!

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Post Re: YomToxic's stories.
would be better without the incest i think

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