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Dream Diary: Immortality
Alright, this is my first dream diary posted. It basically is a rewritten (usually extended) version of my personal dream diary that I write in every time I've had a really cool or lucid dream. Since dreams can be quite lacking in story or thought behind, I took the liberty in writing whatever seems to fit great with what I dreamed. I also made some really quick drawings for it. This one was about immortality, living among several generations, watching people come and go. Please note that I'm not really much of a writer, so my story's probably shit. I didn't actually plan on posting this but then again due to popular demand, here goes... Oh yeah, the story is quite long, probably more than 5 chapters. Also, someone come up with some cute names for the children. Chapter 1: The Many Freaks of NatureArms in arms, the family walked towards the bright light. "At least we die together" the boy thought. Interrupted by the sound of a piece of cloth being removed all around him, he opened his eyes that were instantly blinded by the bright light of the sun. "And here, a boy who turned 20 just a few days ago, still having the body of a 10 year old!" A man shouted. After taking a few seconds to grasp what had just happened, he finally realized he was being held in a giant cage, and shown on a scene. "He may not be useful to you now, but I tell you, this is surely one of the 8 wonders of this world. This is your one and only chance of purchasing this freak of nature. An immortal doll for all your fantasies to come true!" The gasp coming from the audience made the man with a familiar face, look rather satisfied. The boy was most likely going to be sold. "5 gold" one man yelled, but shortly after that, a rain of bids came storming down, ending at 57 gold by a one legged man with a deformed face. "No one going higher than 57? Come on, this boy is 20 years old, looking like he's 10." The man with a familiar face said in a disappointed voice. The man with the deformed face made a slurping noise while licking clean around his own mouth. "In that case, the boy is so-" the man said interrupted by a young woman. "60 gold!" Not being able to clearly see where the bid came from, a slim bit of hope had appeared in front of the boy. Maybe this hideous man would lose the auction to what sounded like a really nice young woman, however it was short lived as the whole audience went silent after the hideous man cried out "This boy is mine! 80 gold!". The boy was sold for 80 gold to the one legged man with a deformed face. Having been bought, the boy was taken to what seemed to be the hideous man's own cellar, probably to be sexually abused. Stripping down naked, the man approached the boy, drooling all over the floor. Getting a glimpse of the cellar, the boy could see that there were other children in small cages all over the stone wall. Some of them had died, and some of them thin as papers. They were mostly boys, but also one girl who still hadn't seem to lost all her emotions like the rest of them. Her crying irritated the man. "Shut your trap, you little pest. You should be happy I haven't killed you!" He yelled while slamming the cage with his fist. "Girls truly disgust me." he said and turned to the boy again. Unable to move out of fear, the boy could do nothing but feel a chill down his spine. Approaching the boy, the man said "But you... You're a gem. A really rare find. A boy that will stay beautiful for all eternity. I'll play with you until I die." The boy could see the girl's cheeks full of tears. It was probably going to be her first time witnessing something like this, the boy thought to himself, while ignoring what was going to be his first time too. All the boy could do was to give her a reassuring look on his face as if it wasn't going to be that bad while the man removed his chains. It didn't have the effect the boy wished for, though. Soon she started to scream and shake the cage, making as much noise as possible. The man, furious over this, turned around and approached the girl's cage. Seizing the opportunity, the boy could move and he started looking for a way to beat this man down in one hit, but found nothing, not even a rock. There was no way he'd be able to overpower this man without a weapon. And so the only way he could get out of there would be to sneak past the man who had now released the girl from her cage and were leaving red hand shaped marks on her tiny back. Perhaps this was the girl's intentions to begin with. "If it wasn't for the fact that you've already been sold, I'd be killing you right now, you little bitch! But maybe this will teach you a lesson to shut the fuck up when I tell you to!" Successfully sneaking past the man, the boy grabbed the door handle to make his escape, but soon realized that the door had been locked. Grabbed by the neck, the boy had little time to react before being thrown back at the wall where the girl was sitting down in her own puddle of piss, shaking from tip to toe. With that bash, the boy had lost all his strength, and it would seem that their struggle was for nothing, however, suddenly a knock on the door made the whole room go as silent as the emotionless boys. "That must be your new master, here to take you, girl." The children curled up next to each other in the corner of the room. Getting a closer look on the girl, the boy could see bruises from multiple beatings on her arms and legs. One leg seemed to bend in a strange way, and it looked painful. The boy suddenly caught a glimpse of something shiny next to them. A piece of sharp glass, probably sharp enough to seriously wound someone, and the boy knew instantly who it could be used against. "You said you wouldn't harm her." a man at the door said. "She was like that when I bought her. Didn't I tell you she had a broken leg?" the hideous man responded. "Very well, then." The man said and approached the children. "What is that boy doing near my girl?" The man asked, giving a disgusted look. The boy looked for a right moment to use the glass, but seemed to find none, and it didn't take long before the girl was taken and carried out of the cellar, crying. As the door shut, the hideous man once again turned around and said "Finally alone again, my boys." He approached the boy once again to grab the boy by his neck, but before he could get a good grip, the boy launched towards the broken glass piece and swung it towards the man, cutting his arm. "You little shit!" the man cried out in anger as he held his bleeding arm. "I'm going to kill you for that!" Feeling the adrenaline, the boy made a new attempt for the door which now was unlocked. He successfully made it out of the cellar. Outside, a horse-drawn carriage started to move. Making it just in time, the boy was able to sneak aboard it without the handler noticing. The carriage was made for goods, but what lied inside was the girl, covered by a blanket, and tied down with a rope. The boy made a gesture with his hand to tell her to keep quiet as he untied her. "We're getting out of here." He whispered to the girl.
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
I feel so insignificant now. Good job, keep going!
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Sat Mar 03, 2012 5:22 pm |
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
Man, you're a fast reader...
Also, still waiting for you to finish yours.
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
It's not really plot oriented so much as detail in situation to situation. It fluctuates well, and fits a weird setting that feels more coherent than a dream usually is. Nice job.
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
My princess maker run's next chapter?
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Sat Mar 03, 2012 5:34 pm |
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Parpol
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
And "Yom the pedo" continuation plox.
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
I'll get my old hard disk.
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Sat Mar 03, 2012 5:40 pm |
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
boy name: Yoko? Yuno? Kai? Girl name: Loa? Mayu? Tia?
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who149 wrote: I'm trying i'm trying~ i'm making I'll try too slowly up my posting. At least once a day for a bit. Then I'll up that too twice, then four, then 8 and so on. Until eventually I wake up one morning and find out that I am actually an Idiot hero. On some quest too cheat on his gf or raise affection of 5 women who conveniently live in my the same dorm as me. In which I only have 100 days to seduce them all.
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
Where we're going we don't need names.
_________________ The truth to everything lies in nothing. Games are awesome Nuff Said. Fuck you all, I love you so much. Storytelling is my true love. I Thought of all of these statements in an instant. I improv so well not improving is like retarding myself. BLAH BLAH BLAH Pretentious crap, references, jokes, and contrary statements.
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parpol DID ask for names, though
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who149 wrote: I'm trying i'm trying~ i'm making I'll try too slowly up my posting. At least once a day for a bit. Then I'll up that too twice, then four, then 8 and so on. Until eventually I wake up one morning and find out that I am actually an Idiot hero. On some quest too cheat on his gf or raise affection of 5 women who conveniently live in my the same dorm as me. In which I only have 100 days to seduce them all.
Remon wrote: Now we can dominate the porn industry, camera industry, AND the world! YomToxic wrote: YOU BETTER STAY ALIVE OR ELSE I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN AND RAPE YOU DEAD.
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Boy: Coco Girl: Nina? Idfk, also, the eyes of the pic are a bit too low, her forehead looks giant.
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
Need and want are two different things. We tend to have more of the second. You probably know that well about people AFH.
_________________ The truth to everything lies in nothing. Games are awesome Nuff Said. Fuck you all, I love you so much. Storytelling is my true love. I Thought of all of these statements in an instant. I improv so well not improving is like retarding myself. BLAH BLAH BLAH Pretentious crap, references, jokes, and contrary statements.
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Parpol
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Re: Dream Diary: Immortality
I'll draw a proper one when I have time.
Keep the names coming and I'll decide later on before I write the next part.
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